And there was heat, a strange moist heat at his temple that seared through the freezing water that kept swallowing him, a fire where no fire should burn.
这里的 that kept swallowing him和 where no fire should burn应该都是修饰the freezing water的吧。a fire是 sear的宾语。
那样作者为何把这个句子写得这么别扭？
And there was heat, a strange moist heat at his temple that seared a fire through the freezing water that kept swallowing him, where no fire should burn.
如此写对不对？
原句好好的，为什么要改呢？反而改错了。
a fire 是 heat 的同位语，网友把它放在seared 的后面作宾语：seared a fire 是不对的。sear 的宾语是“烧焦某物品”，如何能是 fire 呢？“烧焦了大火”？
a fire where no fire should burn 是 fire 的定语从句，表地址。类似：
It was a firewhere no fire should burn.那是一场不应该燃烧的大火。